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Hi! This shot has a lot of interesting points to it that can hurt or help the shot overall, it's really going to depend on the viewer. The candid nature of the shot appeals to me, I love candid shots and catching life as it happens. The girl in the shot is looking at you but doesn't look posed, reminds me of my Mom when it comes time to take pictures, she's hiding most of the time too.
The angle of the shot works very well, like you are sitting below the bar, looking up. The cut off of the elbows is a bit distracting though and the background is also a bit distracting to me. Maybe a slightly tighter crop on the sides and a longer one on the bottom.
The contrast is very well done, the shirt is a touch bright but it works for this shot with the darker scarf covering her lower face.
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