CRITIQUE CLUB COMMENT
My first impression of the photo unfortunately was, "why the brick wall?" In my opinion the brick wall does nothing to enhance the photo, does not seem to go with the headdress piece as far as I can tell, and seems therefore out of place. Additionally, the white t-shirt also is out of place with the headdress. In other words, right off the bat I see a photo that doesn't make any sense. Now here is the really difficult part. The photo challenge is rule of thirds and I think you did manage to get the headdress centered roughly where it should be. In other words, you technically met the challenge requirements. However, here is where you realize that to score well in a challenge you must first and foremost meet the challenge (which you did) but then you ALSO have to meet the challenge in a creative or photographically pleasing way. Because the photo doesn't have a lot of creativity (i.e. you didn't take time to dress up in an outfit that matched the headdress or shoot against a backdrop like say a jungle or such) your photo loses what it had going for it. The same mask shot on a dark background of thick jungle leaves where you (or the model) is dressed darkly hiding amongst the foilage would have scored much higher in my opinion. Again, it's not the mask or the composition that's hurting you here. Another minor distraction I see is that your skin (or that of the model) has some bruises or modled appearance and shadows or something make the hands look dirty in places. All of these things just add more to distract from your photo. You want people focused on that mask, not on bruises, spots, etc. Once again, technically I think you are very close to hitting the rule of thirds here. Drop the distractions and you'd be gold. Good luck. |
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