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03/12/2007 12:59:31 PM |
Greetings from the Critique Club!
This photo is telling a story. The pad and pen represent a letter that was just written. That letter was put into the envelope. That envelope was sealed with a kiss. Then she suddenly had to go to the loo and so she just left it all lying there.
The photo is sharp and focused and all that. You probably used a tripod so that you could have a nice small aperture and a nice big depth of field. I like the lighting, particularly on the pen.
But this photo is only as good as its story, and the story has gaps. For example, the pad and envelope are just floating in black space. Sure, it's good to remove "distractions" in the background, but having no background is itself a distraction when it doesn't match the story. Besides, the desk or table or bed(!) could provide some intriguing clues into the characters involved. It might also be good to have signs that she just ripped a page out of that notebook, like some straggling bits of paper. Also, you have a fancy pen but a cheap notebook. What does that mean? You have very few signifiers here, so they should all contribute to your story.
Can't seal this with a kiss, sorry! :) |
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03/04/2007 11:04:05 PM |
| I like the shot, maybe I will figure it out, later. |
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03/02/2007 12:35:28 PM |
| Sealed With A Lipstick Kiss |
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02/27/2007 08:18:02 PM |
| A little stark, but good illustration of that acronym. |
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02/27/2007 05:19:38 PM |
| Simple Whites Are Lovely Kid - 8 |
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02/27/2007 03:00:54 AM |
Sealed With A Loving Kiss?
If thats what the acronym is then you'd have been better without the pen and pad |
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02/26/2007 07:54:57 PM |
| Couldn't figure out what SWALK was... some sort of takeoff on "sealed with a kiss"? |
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02/26/2007 07:09:04 PM |
| I've heard of SWAK before but not SWALK. What does the L stand for? |
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02/26/2007 02:14:55 PM |
| l=little? Nice idea although slightly austere for a love letter. |
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02/26/2007 12:23:11 PM |
| I like the idea but isn't it a bit cold on a black background? |
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02/26/2007 12:20:09 AM |
| Isn't it just swak?? Still, good one!! |
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