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03/04/2007 04:53:47 AM |
Hi, Greetings from the Critique Club:
Composition: Okay...I like the idea. And yes, insomnia generally takes place in the bedroom...but again, this image is cluttered. Try and keep the image with as little details as possible. Ask yourself......does this item or that item need to be there. Also, I feel those shelves really cut the image up....they enclose the story and the majority of the image into the bottom two thirds...and that can hurt the score.
Technical: I understand why you chose BW tonings...to make the viewer work out the story without the colours doing all the work. But you need to work on the tonings themself. A dramatic and draining scene such as this really needs heavy tones...to express the mood straight up to the viewer.
Overall: I feel you were on the right track...and you knew what you wanted, but you became frustrated at not being able to put it into one story. Keep trying and watch details. Ask yourself if that needs to be in the image and work it from there. Draw the image on paper and build it from there. You will find that half the clutter wouldn't have made it to the piece of paper...so why should it make it to the final photo. Good luck and keep experimenting. |
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02/26/2007 10:29:26 AM |
| Nice idea. I think a cleaner background would make it look better |
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02/22/2007 08:18:18 PM |
| Good use of multiple exposures and nice composition. Only thing I would suggest is that for the shot on the left to have kept the eyes open, since it would have conveyed insomnia better (looks like he's sleeping over there). |
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02/22/2007 08:04:10 PM |
| Good capture of this hateful experience. 8 |
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02/22/2007 02:51:10 PM |
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02/22/2007 11:18:10 AM |
| This certainly gets the insomia idea across very nicely! |
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02/22/2007 08:55:51 AM |
| Clever idea. Like the multi-exposure idea (or multi-flash and using the bulb setting). I think color would have been better, and a harsher lighting angle. One of the better ones in this challenge |
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02/21/2007 08:14:22 PM |
| I hear you! Nice effects. |
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02/21/2007 12:27:16 PM |
| i like the way you have the photo like overlapping here it looks really cool |
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02/21/2007 09:24:08 AM |
| I know what you mean...have it occasionally, it sucks! photographically I like the multi-exposures and contrast. |
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02/21/2007 01:51:37 AM |
| Oh yeah dude. Been going to sleep at 4am for the past... week and a half? Two weeks? Good contrast and effective use of the multiple subjects. |
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02/21/2007 12:13:22 AM |
| I love your concept here. Probably very difficult to execute successfully, but nice attempt nonetheless. |
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