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03/06/2007 11:07:33 AM |
Greetings from the Critique Club. The following comments are in response to your request for a critique on your challenge submission. Please feel free to send me a PM concerning my comments.
An interesting an emotive image, this requires the viewer to pause and try to get the story because of its subject matter. The choice of Black and White helps limit the subject to the young woman and her surroundings. The title with the subject of the challenge, however, carries much of the meaning. Without the title it would be difficult, I think, to understand the concept of self-hate because of an eating disorder. Nonetheless, the story is there.
I like the pose of the woman with her identity obscured by the hand over her face. The ribs showing on her back and the thin body contribute to the message being presented. The composition seems casual in the arrangement of elements but makes the setting definitely a close bathroom in which the subject seems trapped. I don't understand, however, the inclusion of the items on the vanity--the hair straightener(?) and papers seem to take away from the idea that her only reason for being in the bathroom is her illness. I find the angle of the camera interesting, too, that the lines of the room are a bit off kilter enhancing the idea that the subject is not feeling quite right.
Technically it's not a bad image. I enjoy seeing a full range of tones from black to white. But there are some over-exposed whites in the toiletpaper and on the sink...perhaps from a strong flash? If it is flash, then bouncing or diffusing the flash could hellp. In my view the "grainy" quality of the image does not detract...but I come from a film background where that was more commonly used to advantage than now where many people (especially at DPChallenge) only wish to see perfectly clean images without noise or grain. I suggest using grain sparingly in challenge entries if your aim is a high score--otherwise I don't see it as an issue.
Overall, I think this image is successful in telling its story.
Keep creating, you've obviously got something to say!
--Kadi |
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02/26/2007 07:12:54 PM |
| You're gonna get hammered for not using a bigger size but I'm giving it a 7. I think it's an emotive pose. Doesn't necessarily make me think, "hate" but the title helps. I like it. |
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02/26/2007 12:26:50 PM |
| you might not be perfect... but you're close! ;) |
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02/26/2007 09:33:26 AM |
a little grainy.
the picture is too boxy for me
But nice composition and subject works well |
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02/25/2007 02:12:45 PM |
| if she doesnt lift the seat it will be rather messy |
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02/24/2007 07:44:38 AM |
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02/23/2007 11:51:51 PM |
| nice tonal range. composition could be better, elements don't interact with the frame very well |
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02/23/2007 07:14:04 PM |
| You know I'm gonna say what everyone below me has already said. Fantastic idea, good composition, bad sizing. 5 |
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02/23/2007 10:59:53 AM |
| nice title, i see where you were going with this photograph. i like the composition, nice contrast. good job. |
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02/23/2007 12:36:53 AM |
| Self loathing... the worst. Really nice shot! |
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02/22/2007 10:55:30 PM |
| perfect would be boring as all hell |
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02/22/2007 04:40:01 PM |
| Powerful image, but the low quality and small size detract from the overall impact. Drop me a PM or search the forums for advice on how to fix that. |
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02/21/2007 02:38:24 PM |
| I'm sure you'll have been told this a dozen times already, but check out how to resize properly. This shot has a lot of potential. |
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02/21/2007 01:57:29 PM |
| i like this alot, its very good, the only thing i dont like, is that you can tell shes trying to hide her breast for the picture, it looks like shes grabing it instead of just covering it up even. its bothersome. but besides that i like this picture, and the idea alot. good job. |
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02/21/2007 12:29:17 PM |
| I really like the idea you were going with here. The one thing that's gonna hurt your score is the image size. 640 pixels on the longest side is the standard for submsisions. You've done a great job conveying your message with the photo, and I wish you luck in the challenge. |
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02/21/2007 12:29:06 PM |
| did this girl just throw up or something??? but i like the way you have the photo set up it looks good |
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02/21/2007 09:37:24 AM |
| why such a small photo? I like the theme you're playing with here. |
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02/21/2007 09:32:11 AM |
| why so small? use the size allowance to show details in your photo ... |
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