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Overall, I think this is a pretty good picture, but there are a couple of things I think would have made it more emotive with the viewers.
The lighting is good, perhaps too good. There are no shadows, and the background is a nice solid black. Perhaps using sidelighting could have cast some interesting shadows and given more "drama" to the shot.
Though you fill the frame well, it is cropped a little too tight for my personal taste and perhaps too far left in the frame. Together, these two elements make it feel off-balanced to me.
I like the desaturation, and think that it adds interest to this shot because it really makes her eyes the focus of attention.
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Best wishes in future challenges.