|Greetings from the Critique Club
Hi, Firstly this is a nice shot, a good idea and as was pointed out
in the comments well exposed (difficult with black objects in the shot..)
I think you scored OK with the voters, maybe deserved to do better as it has some interesting elements that lift it above other entries..
Well, the flash is a little harsh and like it or not this gives the immidiate impression of a snap shot, this will hit your votes
Composition is OK, with 'eye' contact from both subjects
Overall, a nice picture, you could try to be more creative with your compositions, Look at the top 20 in the challenge for ideas.. and avoid harsh direct flash... an off camera cord can really help, or as a cheaper alternative use a flash diffuser or try 'bouncing' the flash off a wall or ceiling..