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06/13/2006 02:44:46 AM |
::: Critique Club :::
Hi, my name is Kari and from the critique club.
First Impression - the most important one:
An interesting picture to retake ... some improvements .. but some errors as well.
Subject:
This meets the challenge ... and does so very well .. but I am not sure that you used the comments you hasve recieved to create this new image .. so that you have taken the shot and just used your more critical eye to improve.
Composition:
This works well .. you have the indicators on the thrids horizontal ... and the white line in almost there at the top ... this is a narrower shot ... which is quite lovely in that it seems to create its own length and create great lines for the eyes to follow.
Technical (Colour and light):
I really like the crispness of the colours on the first shot .. they seem so much more vibrant .. although from the dirt I would say that the bus was newer then :) ... I think this is natural light and that is fine ... the image seems slightly sharper this time, and it has not been overdone which is great.
To grow its vote?:
I agree with Yanko .. cloning out the dirt would have been a smart move ... it just makes it a pic of something dirty. Also the colours sold better more vibrant and looking at that may also help.
Summary:
Great work ... and a good improvement from the original .. keep it up.
If you've got any questions about this critique, please feel free to contact me via the PM system.
Cheers
Kari |
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06/11/2006 03:48:59 PM |
| Looks like you just made some subtle improvements in the highlights and shadows which look better. You also went with a slimmer crop which does make the vertical lines appear longer. One thing I would have done here since it's advance editing is to clone out that dirt below the light indicator to make it look cleaner like the original. |
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06/10/2006 12:27:03 AM |
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06/08/2006 09:29:38 AM |
Is it a bus? or a train?
Fooled me for a while :-) |
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06/06/2006 07:22:22 AM |
| Well ... I don't know what this is or is supposed to be. It looks very uninteresting and boring. |
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