Hi Anna, prepare to be critiqued :-)
I don't really get much time to do CC stuff these days, actually I am surprised they haven't kicked me out of the club yet! By the looks of it you probably contribute the most to the Critique Club yourself, good on ya.
The negative space challenge seemed to have stirred up a hornet's nest as to what negative space really is or isn't. My description is that it is the area surrounding the main subject which is just there and adds interest but doesn't distract away at all. This doesn't necessarily mean that it has to be completely black or white or whatever.
To your negative space photo: Your photo has definitely met the negative space challenge. When I opened your pic my eyes fell immediately upon your main subject, your son, standing on the deck. Your negative space of water, landscape and sky adds interest to the whole image.
By placing your boy in the lower right hand corner you've followed the rule of thirds to create extra impact.
The whole image appears a little on the soft side to me especially the background. Although this isn't really a negative factor, I think a sharper background, especially the water, would have given your photo that extra boost.
I have a couple of minor recommendations for improvement. First of all I would have preferred to see the boy as a complete silohuette, completely black. I can see some color in his shirt and hair. Had you metered off the sun or a brighter part of the sky, you could have created that silohuette effect, it would have also silohuetted the deck.
What also might have been interesting is if you had gotten higher, on a chair or something and photographed more downward. This would have gotten more water into your image and only used the water as the negative space. This would have probably looked quite amazing as well, especially with the sun shining across it leading up to the deck.
Overall an interesting and original photo which I scored a 6.
Good luck in the upcoming challenges.
Gary
Message edited by author 2003-08-26 10:22:17. |
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