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06/02/2006 06:01:16 AM |
Greetings from the Critique Club. My critiques are generally geared towards trying to help you improve your score within DPC, and not on any true "artistic" merit of the photograph itself, unless it relates to DPC voters and scoring. Please keep that in mind as you read this.
Initial Thoughts
white flame-ball in top corner very over-powering, and using a "sexy" model is a little cliche.
Composition/Content
Quite a number of people chose the "hot model" route in this challenge, and it's not an altogether bad choice. Male voter demographics are rather large. Knowing that, however, you generally still need a very good technical photo to really score high, even with the best looking models. For me, and others have noted, your choice to have the furnace opened has kind of taken away from this shot. Yes, it helps convey "heat" a little more, but it also overpowers the shot, your model, and the lighting. Your composition is nice for your choice of including the flame, but I think you'd have done better cropping closer in, leaving the flame out, giving the background a nice red/hot "feel", and maybe spritzing the model to simulate sweat. Just a suggestion of course, but as your photo stands, one can't help to just be distracted by that nuclear ball of flame.
Background
Just a touch busy, but it's that ball of flame that keeps standing out for me. Kind of the "lesser of two evils" thing.. but I do believe you could have conveyed heat without it, and not caused it to be the focal point of your photograph.
Camera Work/Technical
Nice work to expose this, given the intense light you had to work with in areas. You've lost detail in some parts of the model because of the glow, but not to the point where it detracts too much. I am impressed with how well you've captured most of the model given the lighting conditions though.
Digital Processing
Not much information given, but I do see a little too much over-smoothing here. For me, it doesn't really help to convey the "heat" element. A little more perspiration on the model (real or fake), would have helped sell that idea for me. Otherwise.. everything looks pretty good.
Fits the Challenge
Well, it fits the challenge, but as I've noted, probably could have fit it much better. I'm left struggling with what exactly it was you were trying to say was heat here.. the model, or the great big ball of flame. Unfortunately, for me, they are such conflicting elements that "both" doesn't really work.
My Opinion of the Photo
Well, obviously I'm not a fan of the flame, we've covered that, but I also don't really like the gratuitous use of a "sexy model", even if the challenge lent itself well to such a thing. However, having said that, you've pulled it off rather well, for what it is. Less smoothing, more emphasis on one or the other element in this shot, and a tighter crop, might have helped you score better than you did.
Good luck on future challenges. |
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05/28/2006 06:34:04 PM |
| Hot? definately, heat? I'm not so sure. |
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05/28/2006 03:10:06 AM |
| Nice image, the bright light in the upper left adds to the image... maybe crop it a tad higher to omit the edge of the hands. |
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05/26/2006 06:25:58 AM |
| With that model and the outfit, it could be a 'hot night' anywhere. The only thing I would change is cropping out the thumbs at the bottom of the image and cloning out the distracting white blotch on the top left of the model's hair. Well done! |
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05/26/2006 05:27:03 AM |
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05/25/2006 04:57:04 PM |
| hot model... damn... and great composition..7 |
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05/25/2006 10:25:13 AM |
| too smooth, plastic feelin on the face and looks like its painted than being natural |
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05/23/2006 07:58:08 PM |
| A little over Neat Imaged (or it's equivalent). 6. |
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05/23/2006 06:47:25 PM |
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05/22/2006 11:29:55 PM |
| An outstanding subject and interesting use of light. The treatment gives the illusion of physical heat emanating from the model as well as emotional heat. |
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05/22/2006 08:12:53 PM |
| The composition is ok. The image quality is ok. The subject matter is ok. The creativity is ok. - Granted, the model is hot but the light to right kills the shot for me. |
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05/22/2006 07:06:18 PM |
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05/22/2006 06:28:24 PM |
| Yup - she's hot alright! ;) |
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05/22/2006 04:04:58 PM |
| I knew this would be in there someplace! Nice shot. |
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05/22/2006 09:09:00 AM |
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05/22/2006 07:24:35 AM |
dela where? hee hee...I couldnt resist. since I call DE(seaford) my true home Im going to leave ya a comment:
first she is a very pretty girl, the bright light adds the the "heat" almost like she eminates(sp?...too early to go look it up,plus Im lazy today..lol). great comp and focus even for the slow shutter you used for this. the only real problem i have with this is the overuse of Neat Image. Im sure your going to get alot of the NI comments but thats the only real thing i see here. hope this helps a bit. good luck and have a great day!
~~Cher~~ :o) |
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05/22/2006 01:06:40 AM |
| Hot Female ...hot Fire.... those that play with these normally get burnt....8 |
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