From the Critique Club:
First of all let me point out that while I don't truly appreciate abstract photography, I do understand it's draw. That said let's see what we can come up with for a critique.
In this example, you have some awesome lines first off. They drive your eye right to the center bottom of the shot. All the lines lead there and that is a difficult task to achieve! You also have some incredible colors. I love the reds and contrasting yellows.
Now the hard part. While you have incredible lines that lead your eye, the spot that they lead you to is somewhat dissappointing. True there is a texture and color contrast at the 'focal' point but that isn't enough to keep the eye focused or interested. The focal point also isn't truly in focus. This is very distracting. I keep trying to force my eyes out of focus to make something focus in the shot. It doesn't work and is too much work for the viewer. Now if it were even more out of focus that might work, but I don't know what that would do to the background lines... There is a blown out area to the bottom right of the shot. This area just doesn't work. I don't think you could crop it out effectively. I also don't think that burning it would work either. This is simply an overexposure problem that would have to be fixed in camera. There is a bud (not the right term, but I'm not a botonist) sticking up just a bit in the bottom center of the shot. That is also a distraction to your simple composition here. That is something that COULD be cropped out easily enough.
Like I said in prefacing these comments, while abstract is not one of my favorite types of shots, I can appreciate a good one. You have a good eye for that type of thing it looks like. Just practice a bit more and I think you can come up with some AWESOME abstracts if that's your thing.
Yours
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