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Challenge: Shapes II (Basic Editing III)
Camera: Canon EOS-300D Rebel
Location: Back yard. Ramona, CA
Date: Dec 29, 2005
Date Uploaded: Jan 1, 2006

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Statistics
Place: 209 out of 366
Avg (all users): 5.1306
Avg (commenters): 5.8000
Avg (participants): 4.9127
Avg (non-participants): 5.3239
Views since voting: 576
Views during voting: 336
Votes: 268
Comments: 6
Favorites: 0


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01/16/2006 03:17:03 PM
::: Critique Club ::: [The Saj]

First Impressions:

My first impressions with this photo was "wow...that's a cool shot". And I still think that to be the case. ;-)

BTW...I gave this photo a 7 in voting.

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Composition:

The composition is strong. Some might object to this photo being very centered, but I think it works in this case. Though you might also want to consider cropping off the top 1/2" and perhaps 2" from the left. This gives it a strong "rule-of-thirds" commitment and seems to make the orange stand out a bit more.

Subject:

Excellent subject. The orange is well placed and very distinct, the long leaf is a great addition (although I notice upon further inspection that I can see a reflection of this, which helps to answer my question about how this shot was composed. I presumed it is an orange set on a mirror with blue ceiling or sky above?)

Of note, the placement of the model's (namely, you the photographer) hand, was well placed, and well posed.

Technical (Colour, focus, and light):

Focus is sharp on the orange and nicely blurred on the photographer. Lighting is good but might be better. The left side of the photographer is a bit dark .

The focus also gives a very 3D feel allowing the orange to simply lift off the photo.

The colours are bright and cheery, with the background colors are a bit more subdued helping the background subjects to nicely fall into the background of the photo and not detract from the main subject.

Creativity: This was a fun photo. Creative, bright, and juicy. ;-)

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Summary: A fun photo with good clarity. Perhaps not the best entry category (I imagine it'd have done surprisingly well under "Fruit") but overall not a bad entry for the "shapes" challenge.

To improve?: Try a tight crop, remove a bit of the blue toward that top and most of the portion to the left of the photographer. A few minor distractions, namely the shoulders. On the left there is a dip and a rise again. This creates a distracting element. I also believe lowering your left elbow would have helped by reducing the appearance of the shoulder so as to provide more clear space. There are a few minor artifacts, the most noticeable of which is found on the photographer's hand as it holds the camera...was this reflection? I cannot tell...but it is very minor and expected in basic challenge entry.

You should feel good about this entry, it was a great endeavor!

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It is my hope that these insights are helpful, and constructive. If you have any questions regarding this critique, please feel free to PM me.

- Jason "The Saj"
 Comments Made During the Challenge
01/09/2006 01:31:14 PM
thats cool with the use of the mirror, but it throughs me off a bit
01/08/2006 07:28:31 PM
interesting idea, good color
01/07/2006 09:34:22 PM
I like how you have taken the approach to shot a picture from a different angle. Changing position/angle can add dramatic interest. This composition has that but there is elements that can be improved upon to make this shot great. First is that I think the composition would be improved if the photographer had moved such that we see more of the camera and photographer that is hidden by the orange. The circular shape of the lens would greatly compliment the circular shape of the orange and further strengthen the connection to the Shapes Challenge. Also, if you can, addusting the aperature down to the highest settings say 8-16 will greatly improve the depth of field. The background will be in sharper focus which would therefore give us a sharper image of the photographer and his camera in the background. Lastly, I think the leaf on the orange is a distracting element - especially when we can see the reflection of it on the mirror.
01/07/2006 09:38:05 AM
To my mind, the reflection is rather disturbing. 5
01/04/2006 01:02:41 PM
One of my favorites so far. I'm scoring this a 10. I hope you didn't use any Photoshop tricks, because I'd hate to see it get DQ'ed. Maybe the orange was placed on glass? Very cool.


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