Greetings from the Critique Club!
First of all I want to say that I really like this image and I'm surprised to see the score it received. I think this is a really interesting shot, but I also think it's very abstract, and any time you're working in abstracts you're going to cut down your audience a lot.
Let's start with composition. I personally really like the way you framed this image, especialy with the edge of the light source off camera. I'm assuming from the perspective of the dirt that you placed the camera on the ground, which I think was very creative and appropriate for the feel of the photo. The one thing I'm not sure about is the includion of the plants and/or their shadows in the background. While I like the look of it, I think it rakes away from the mood of the photo. If it were me, I would have moved in a little bit closer to the light source and included a bit more of the ground leading up to it. I also would have fully burned out the top background to make it totally black to really bring the focus to the light source. This also would have created a sort of optical illusion, making the light source look like a little factory of its own.
In terms of lighting, the area of the light source closest to the camera is very blown out, which can be realy distracting. It overwhelms they eye and makes it hard to really focus on anything else in the image. Try exposing for the brightest area of an image wen taking a photo. Although this will make the whole photo darker, it's not hard to bring out detail in a dark area but it's impossible to put detail back in a bright area.
There are also a few really distracting bright or dark spots throughout the image that need to be cloned out. Obviously that couldn't be done in a Basic challenge, but in critiquing the image as a whole I just wanted to add that in.
In terms of the challenge, I think this definitely has an industrial feel, but it's not incredibly obvious. In the general sense, that's a good thing, but in the context of this challenge, that may have played a part in your score.
I hope these comments have been helpful. Good luck! |
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