Thanks Heather (I wish we got an email or something when there is a CC critique - I heven't revisited this shot in a while and have only just seen your critique).
I agree with all of your comments. The 'blurry' right side of the pencil is, in fact, another facet of the pencil at a very shalloew angle to the camera. I didn't notice this when I took the shot and would have done something about it if I had.
I din't see any banding on my monitor - do you have an LCD screen?
*Critique Club*
What stands out to me first here, is the shadows on the white background near the bottom of the photo. On my moniter, it seems to be seperating itself into sections, and creating kind of a banding look. Not really sure what causes this, or how to fix it.
the next thing I see is the right side of the pencil looks fuzzy. When I looked harder at this, it appears to be from the light reflection on the right flat side of the pencil.
The angle and framing/cropping are good in my opinion. I like how you didn't center the pencil, but rather put it off to the side.
I like how the reflection extends the pencil all the way through the photo, but I wish that the tip of the pencil weren't so much in the vertical center of the photo.
The color is nice, but wonder if it could be a bit brighter? it seems to be a bit dark on the pencil itself.
It looks like there is more light on the other side of the pencil. I am given this impression by the dark front side of the pencil, and the bright background, where in front of the pencil, it goes into shadow near the bottom of the photo.
Overall, I like the idea, and think that with a few minor adjustments, this could have really been great.
~Heather~
Hehe, lovely detail on the point of that pencil.. superb lighting. great shadow! I would have liked a little bit more of the actual pencil showing. I feel that the horizon is too centered at the moment.
Very precise photo, except the right edge of the pencil (??). Nice use of 1/3 rule. Nice reflection. All that said, it's not got a lot of WOW factor. 6 Rob the Swash
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