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12/26/2004 10:58:36 AM |
Greetings from the Critique Club...
Definately fits the challenge, so that's good heh. Seems the lighting is a bit harsh on the lower part of the photo and almost in need of some more in the upper part.
The focus seems a bit soft throughout, but it's not that bad. As far as composition goes, it's obviously well thought-out, but as far as for viewing, my eyes seem to jump around quite a bit never really coming to rest on a main subject of interest.
I, too, ask myself why the flies? I don't really feel they add anything extra to the image, just seem to busy it up some. I've noticed that when shooting close up shots like this, the image will come out a lot 'cleaner' if you use a paper that is more shiny than coarse. The shadows will fall smoother and there will be soft reflections whereas in this shot, everything seems a bit coarse.
-- Fix the lighting, and use a 'smoother' paper, and I bet your score would increase quite a bit. Overall, it's a good idea, keep shooting!
Message edited by author 2004-12-26 10:59:26. |
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12/19/2004 09:31:35 PM |
Returning for comments:
Very clever! Bumping up. |
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12/19/2004 02:08:40 AM |
| interesting interpretation, but not sure what relevance the flys serve. if you could somehow have managed to get only the R in focus (and eliminated the flys and gradient to brown from top to bottom), this could be great! |
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12/15/2004 10:18:37 PM |
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12/14/2004 04:44:32 PM |
| I like this one. There is a feeling of surrealism to it and reading the word "broken" from the bottom up only adds to it. I only wish there was something in the upper corners to make it more balanced. If you don't have any melting clocks handy, then perhaphs a goldfish to the left and a cabbage to the right? |
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12/14/2004 06:55:11 AM |
unhelpful comments removed
Message edited by author 2005-10-05 06:34:54. |
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12/14/2004 04:56:58 AM |
| Composition: 6, Technical: 6, Appeal: 5, Challenge: 3, Overall Score: 4 (weighted) |
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12/13/2004 12:21:44 PM |
| I think this shot needed more lighting and sharper focus. Great idea! |
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12/13/2004 01:37:43 AM |
| I am confused as to the meaning. Why the flies? The image is so-so. |
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