Interesting side-by-side versions. Karen's initial comment led me to seeing it differently in the original, which I think a still prefer as it allows multiple perspectives related to shape and content. The two side by side provide a fine example of the power of words (Karen's comment) and processing to influence perception.
I like your full out portrait very much, and I likewise think this different approach is quite successful. Pared down to its essentials, it has a different, and maybe greater, emotional impact. They're both very, very good.