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Tamron SP AF 17-50mm f/2.8 Di II LD Aspherical (IF) for Nikon

04/29/2009 01:48:43 PM · #1

Hello all - I hope everyone's afternoon has been as sunny as mine! Just a wanted a bit of feedback on my "Not quite right" challenge entry.

I personally thought this was one of my better portraits - and that it met the challenge in a fairly obvious way - any suggestions as to why this bombed?

I was sitting at around 4.7 for most of the week, the last couple of days saw a pretty dramatic rise!

Thanks, J

kolasi

Nikon D300

04/29/2009 01:56:34 PM · #2

Its a really good portrait, I hadnt voted on the challenge though.

But, maybe i miss the obvious, but what is 'not quite right' about it?

04/29/2009 02:03:45 PM · #3

Er, broken wrists. To me that seems obvious - but then my brain can be a bit abstract sometimes... It's a shame if people didn't see it that way - I did a whole shoot with Riss specifically for this challenge. It wasn't easy for her to put eye liner on!

Canon EF 100mm f/2.8 USM Macro

04/29/2009 05:00:05 PM · #4

Bump!

jotaga

Canon EOS-7D

04/29/2009 05:42:02 PM · #5

I really liked this picture (exposure, framing, etc.), but I didnt catch your message on that scene... For me the "not quite right" thing was not so obvious, because:

1- She seems very happy and "movement able" for a person with two broken wrists;
2- I didnt realize that her wrists were broken because of her mood and also because of the simmetry on the two arms (itÂ´s very unusual someone with two arms broken). That seems more like some gloves or some "wrist cloth".

Besides, a wrist broken and regularly "repaired" itÂ´s not something wrong... it would be if she had her right arm broken and her left arm fixed...

Sorry for my poor english... its not my native language.

Regards

Nikon AF-S NIKKOR 24-70mm f/2.8G ED

04/29/2009 05:50:50 PM · #6

That's great - thanks for taking the time to comment. I don't normally moan about photos not doing very well but I find it soooo hard to accept that people didn't understand this shot.

My view on how this shot works is: pretty expression and "normal" style portrait, but it's not right because her wrists are broken. I wasn't even going to mention her wrists in the title but I thought I had better to make it obvious.

Does anyone not see it this way? I'm genuinely intrigued.

e.t.a this shot came 4th

(and it's a great shot I really like it!) - but it's a similar thing - it's not right because it's broken and otherwise a very beautiful thing.

Am I missing something with the technically wrong with my shot? Pose, lighting etc? Sorry to be persistent but I've not received any negative feedback, I'd love someone to lay into it!! *holds breath* :-)

p.s

jotaga your English is very good!!

Message edited by author 2009-04-29 17:57:11.

citymars

Nikon D700

04/29/2009 05:56:59 PM · #7

Left a comment!

freakin_hilarious

Canon EOS-550D Rebel T2i

Tamron SP AF 28-75mm f/2.8 XR Di for Canon

04/29/2009 06:18:44 PM · #8

I gave you a 5. I got what you were going for, and I didn't ding you for DNMC, but I also didn't think it portrayed the challenge very well. I think the phrase "not quite right" can be equated to "something wrong". I don't think it's wrong to have broken wrists, just unfortunate. To compare that idea to the 4th place shot, there's definitely a couple of things wrong there. The statue on the right has no head! The one on the left has no arm! That ain't right.

Regardless, I don't really see any DNMC issues with your score breakdown. It's too perfect a curve for that. My guess would be that most people got what you were going for but simply weren't wowed by the image itself. It's just not that engaging a portrait to me, so there was nothing to push my vote into the top half.

jotaga

Canon EOS-7D

Canon EF 100mm f/2.8 USM Macro

04/29/2009 06:23:58 PM · #9

The 4th place shows one statue without arm and another without head... for me the irregularity is much more obvious...

... for my perception the point was seeing the broken wrists, but not the fact that the wrists were broken at all...