the second one doesn't really speak to me, the lighting seems rather uninteresting, the skin tones look dark and her attitude and facial expression are too posed. also the one grain thingy in the foreground distracts a little by beeing too blurred and takes too much space. the crop doesn't work for me either, maybe having the frame in landscape orientation with your model at a rule of thirds position might have been a better choice.
the perspective/compositon with that voyeuristic flair has a lot of potential though. ;)
the first one is really great, i love her facial expression (having her looking outide the frame rather than at the camera was the right choice!) and the "earthy" film-like tones, that some might depreciate as "too flat", but i really like it.
the backlighting works great in that case! what was your editing and camera settings on that shot?
the centered crop works it this case, because the way she's looking outside the frame on one side kinda "decenters" the composition already and gives it tension.
i'm not sure how i feel about the sun flare, it certainly unbalances the shot and distracs a bit, but is also a great addition. maybe cropping off of the bottom and the sun flare just a tad might solve that "issue".
just my 2 cents tho, hope i could help a lil. :)
|