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03/06/2008 12:07:08 AM · #1

Hey Guys,

I haven't ask for a critique for a while.. so here are some... comments and critiques most welcome
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Thanks Guys!

jbsmithana

Nikon AF-S DX Zoom-Nikkor 12-24mm f/4.0G IF-ED

03/06/2008 12:21:37 AM · #2

Left a couple of comments. I'm not a portrait guy but I can let you know what I like anyway.

Nikon AF-S NIKKOR 24-70mm f/2.8G ED

03/06/2008 09:12:20 AM · #3

good morning bump!

alanfreed

Nikon Z9

03/06/2008 09:33:04 AM · #4

A couple quick, honest thoughts. I think white is a good background for variety, but I think it would be great to see something *other* than plain white as a background in this series. I think it would be nice to incorporate something that gives people a flavor of who she is.

Sharpness seems to be a recurring issue in the shots you posted. Very few of them appear to be tack sharp, and some of them have artifacts here and there to liter the background up a bit.

And not to sound too critical, but the text overlay really doesn't look very professional to me.

On the positive side, she's a beautiful girl!

Message edited by author 2008-03-06 09:36:20.

Bebe

Canon EOS-5D Mark II

Canon EF 24-70mm f/2.8L USM

03/06/2008 09:37:35 AM · #5

I left a few comments.

Nikon AF-S NIKKOR 24-70mm f/2.8G ED

03/06/2008 09:46:57 AM · #6

Originally posted by alanfreed:

Maybe it's time I get new glasses...lol cause I actually spent extra sure to focus on the eyes doing this :( The artifacts etc, will be cleaned up before I go to print them for her. and the text overlay was her request.

Thanks for the comments though!

and ya she is really pretty :) (she's my cousin)

Message edited by author 2008-03-06 09:47:12.

alanfreed

Nikon Z9

03/06/2008 10:15:21 AM · #7

Originally posted by Eyesup:

Maybe it's time I get new glasses...lol cause I actually spent extra sure to focus on the eyes doing this :(

A few of them seem nicely focused, but I'm thinking that a few of them were possibly processed to the point where sharpness was lost (or to where it just looked a bit off)... or you were using such a shallow DOF that one eye was in focus much more so than the other. These two shots are examples of ones that don't seem sharp to me:

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And this one just feels way too overprocessed:

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Nikon AF-S NIKKOR 24-70mm f/2.8G ED

03/06/2008 10:50:29 AM · #8

Originally posted by alanfreed:

And this one just feels way too overprocessed:

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so funny story... I was editing these with her there just to show her how this sort of this is done... sort of a way of making the point that the models she sees every day get this typ of treatment and that's why they always look so good. anyway, I did this shop in Portrait Pro 6 for fun and slide the skin slider all the way... she said she loved it and had to have it... so that's how it got in the set... I would never of my own free will process something for print like that :)

as for the shallow DOF yes I was using quite an shallow DOF (2.8) on many... that could be the problem

Message edited by author 2008-03-06 10:51:00.

alanfreed

Nikon Z9

03/06/2008 11:04:02 AM · #9

Originally posted by Eyesup:

as for the shallow DOF yes I was using quite an shallow DOF (2.8) on many... that could be the problem

If you look carefully at this one, you can see the disadvantage of using a dramatically shallow DOF and why you have to be very cautious when doing so:

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The focus appears to be crisp on the pink sleeve and arm on the right, but her face is out of focus. Just the small change in distance between her face and her sleeves from the camera makes a noticeable difference in the focus of the shot. Focus on the eyes has to be spot on at 2.8.

For that particular shot, using a 2.8 aperture wouldn't be appropriate anyway, since it appears that you probably wanted her entire body in focus (conversely, you have other shots where you were obviously trying to take advantage of the shallow DOF by blurring out parts of her body and maintaining focus on the face).

Message edited by author 2008-03-06 11:04:39.

03/06/2008 11:07:31 AM · #10

yes your're right... I do notise that... and I think I may have at 10:00 last night too...:) As you might be able to tell I'mdoing a lot more experimentation with lots of stuff... trying to find my "style" so to speak... gratned still need to pay more attention to camera settings :)

many thanks!

03/06/2008 12:29:53 PM · #11

afternoon bump

Canon EF 16-35mm f/2.8L USM

03/06/2008 04:22:58 PM · #12

one last try at a comment or two... or three?

drewbixcube

Canon EOS-7D

03/06/2008 04:33:42 PM · #13

You have some good comments/critiques so far and I would like to echo some the good things. Also point out something I noticed when looking at your OP with all the thumbs. To me it seems that every picture has a different color cast. The color of her face/hair is different in a bunch of the pictures. I don't know what caused this, maybe AWB, or editing steps, but it just doesn't look consistant. 1005/6/7 are the best examples...the color cast seems to change in each photo. Other than that and the sharpness/background color brought up earlier, they look great. Nice poses and pretty model.

-drew

Edit: To expound...1006 looks warmer/richer than 1005 and 1007. The other two look cooler, more blue, and not as natural. The color in 1006 looks better IMO and the other two.

Message edited by author 2008-03-06 16:37:26.