POLICE UNVEIL ATVS FOR BEACH PATROL
by ellamay

Comment:
ARGH!!!! Those comments! There is just the right amount of "empty space" to create a sense of place. Nothing is wasted. And are people really complaining about grain in a newspaper challenge? Egads! This was my favorite for this challenge. It had an actual headline, relevence, artistic merit, the works. I'm really disappointed to see it place in the middle.

Untitled
by EddyG

Comment:
You seem to have the lighting, outfit, backdrop very well planned. The model has lovely coloring which you've captured well with the lighting. She seems a bit nervous---I'd suggest something to loosen her up a bit if she is willing to sit for you again. Some wine, music she likes....something to make her a bit more comfortable with the process.

Contemplation
by waterlilies

Comment:
Her makeup looks shiny and unnatural when compared to the casual outfit and setting.

Kelly
by Tallbloke

Comment:
Very shiny, creased background overwhelms the model. She has a nice expression but the shadows in the lower portion of her face (under the apples of her cheeks and under her chin) are very unflattering.

My Love
by Thousands_Fall

Comment:
This is a bit too soft focus. Her eyes appear very flat and lifeless. There is no sparkle. Her hair looks wet--an odd choice without some kind of background context to clue the viewer in.

Tess
by sixmacs

Comment:
The background is extremely distracting. I would suggest using shallow depth of field when you can't place your subject in front of a simple background.

Glowing
by lizzyc3

Comment:
Her lips look weird on the right half, particularly the lower portion--very smudged and overly saturated, like a clumsy touch-up was done. My eye keeps being drawn to that and the freckles on her arm.

My Brother Dave
by bobdaveant

Comment:
The subject is too close to the background and appears to be lit with the flash in your camera. Having the subject sit further away and directing a separate light at the background will separate your subject from the background and eliminate the closed-in, flattened head look that this proximity creates.

Katherine
by kncoughlin

Comment:
This image is disturbingly Lolita-like to me. She has too much lipgloss and she appears to be wearing nothing but a neclace under the low-cut, over-sized tuxedo jacket (an odd choice of costuming, IMO). She has gorgeous Rapunzel-like hair and beautiful skin which you've captured well.

Tamara
by Philos

Comment:
Her lipsitick is rather crusty looking because her lips are chapped. Also, it is far to overdone for a model of this age. I know it is very hard to capture eyes this dark. I have nearly black eyes myself--I'm aware of how difficult it can be to capture highlights when the irises seem to disappear into the pupil. It can be done with careful lighting and exposure. What I see on my monitor are rather flat, black irises with tiny dots of white. Kind of unsettling. It might be due to overly soft focusing.