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hawkidaComment by HBunch: *Critique Club*
My eyes are first drawn to the balls here. I think because of the angled bricks of clay, they act almost like an arrow, pointing right at the balls.
I can see that you took a moment to set this up, however it does look sloppy. It looks like you simply ripped apart the primary colors and threw them on the table. this is most clear in the blue square in the upper left, and the yellow in the upper right. Had you even taken 2 seconds to smoothe them out so that they laid flat, that would have made this look like a bit more thought was put into it.
I honestly think this would work better in the secondary challenge. It seems like you have created a story. Blue and yellow make green. Red and blue make purple...etc. This story fits much better into secondary colors than primary colors.
The focus is ok, but I find the bit of out of focus ring to be distracting, as it is right there "in our face" so to speak.
The colors are ok. I've never tried to photograph clay before, so it could be a tricky texture, but I wonder if maybe different lighting would help the colors really punch.
The background is not good. I would have went with a solid color background. Probably white.
~Heather~
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