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alyamiComment by karmat: CRITIQUE CLUB CRITIQUE
by karmat
Using the window as a frame is a very interesting and effective technique here, I think.
As a picture, I think that if the view out the window was better focused, it would have been better received. As it is, the "stuff" in the background is barely indistinguishable, especially to a voter going quickly. What hurts worse than the background being out of focus is that the window sill is also rather soft. As a result, the eye keeps searching for the focal point of the photograph, but since nothing is clearly defined as such, it doesn't hold the viewer's attention.
Also, outside the window seems a bit overexposed. Admittedly, this is one of the most difficult kinds of shots, at least for me, when one part is very bright, and the other is very dark. Given that, you have done well, but the overexposure adds to the fact that the information through the window isn't easily discernable.
As a challenge entry, *I* think your connection to the challenge is tenuous at best. You do, indeed, have a "cultural" subject, per se, but it doesn't "scream" event to me. Actually, it doesn't even whisper it. I may be missing something obvious, and if I am, please feel free to contact me and let me know. I suspect, though, if it is not that obvious to me, it may not be to others, either.
Again, using the window as a frame is very effective, and I like that it is tilted. That adds interest and variety, I think.
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