A Three Panel Affair
by menele

Comment by karmat:
CRITIQUE CLUB CRITIQUE
by karmat

Very humorous progression you chose there. :)

Compositionally, each of the shots is strong on their own, individually, and they work together to tell an interesting story. Maybe the phone number should have been 867-5309 (though you may be too young to understand that). The undies in the bottom look too much like an advertisement and not like they just got dropped (though I'm glad you used apparently clean ones). Maybe if they were a bit more "ruffled" and on something besides a white backdrop it would seem a bit more real.

Technically, the focus is right on. There are no distracting oof spots (not that everything oof is distracting, but if there is enough of it, it can be) and the lighting is even throughout the series. They seem a bit drab to me, though, as if there could be a bit more brightness added to the colors to make them *pop*. A slight boost in contrast may do that as well.

Overall, good work, and thanks for the chuckle.

If I need to further clarify or explain myself, please feel free to contact me.

karma

Day 4 - Screw Loose
by menele

Comment by CNovack:
This is a good composition because it is simple, clean and minimalistic in presentation. Detail is very good with a lot of detail on the groves of the screw as well as the spotting 'texture' of the metal. Lighting is spot on. My only critique is that slight shadow off to the left of the head of the screw - another light or different lighting configuration would take care of that before clicking the shutter. Another way to get rid of it is through PP with use of the clone tool.

Day 6 - Bridge
by menele

Comment by Bruce_the_Robert:
I like this, and the subdued tones work for me here; at points the greys almost look painted, which is a nice effect. I see some jaggies (possibly from sharpening) in a beam on the right by the windows; angles are tough for sharpening, but otherwise the processing looks good.

Day 6 - Bridge
by menele

Comment by violinist123:
Nice shapes within shapes created by the bridge. Not a lot going on here, but it has a pleasing abstract quality which I like.

Day 6 - Bridge
by menele

Comment by jonfrommk:
Great pespective and capture of angles and patterns. Lovely shot

Day 6 - Bridge
by menele

Comment by Dirt_Diver:
I would like to see a little bit more of the bridge but this is a god shot. I would have used an adjustment curvers layer on this image because of the highlighted and darker area's.

Day 6 - Bridge
by menele

Comment by jackal9:
Great range. Nice shot and processing!

Day 6 - Bridge
by menele

Comment by electrolost:
nice angle I love bridge pics.

A Three Panel Affair
by menele

Comment by LN13:
An interesting idea. The photos could be a little sharper, and the undies come off (excude the pun) as too staged.

Day 5 - Music
by menele

Comment by menele:
Thanks for comments, you are entirely correct :)

Reprocessed, although perhaps a little harsh now?


Message edited by author 2007-05-06 07:04:23.