Goodbye Train Whistle Bluesby
HipychikComment by Artifacts: Positives:
Framing, perspective and interest are the strength of this composition. What does this image mean is the question every viewer will ask. What is the little girl thinking?
Technicals:
General technicals are OK. It has no serious defects. That is always a good thing. The perspective using the tracks, though cliche, is very good.
Don't know if you did anything special in post processing to make the tracks look more interesting, but they do. Color, light... something.
Sharpness is not overdone. Outside the tracks the color is just OK; color and detail needs better definition in those areas. Sky neither hurts nor helps the composition.
The Challenge:
Ya know, it meets the challenge well but some voters will probably still fault you for lack of creativity anyway. Not a lot but some.
Your near 5.9 score is very good by DPC standards and was .4 above the average given in this particular challenge. DPCers like this picture!
I gave your image a "7". That means I think it was average. I faulted it mostly for technical and artistic reasons. The artistic reason was center framing your model. The most important position in THIS image is the foreground. You gave that to the tracks, not to your model. I felt your model should have occupied that space and the tracks subsidiary to that. I think it would have supported the challenge topic better as well.
I know, you are gonna wonder about me for this, but it hit me that this image lacks detail and appealing color in the vegetation on either side of the tracks. Outside your model, I was immediately drawn to that. Its lack of color and detail is a viewer disappointment.
Suggestions:
Frame your model lower and in the foreground for greater impact. She will also occupy more space which will be good to. Use post processing to bring out better greens and more detail in the vegetation on either side of the tracks.
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