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hajekaComment by Sting11165: First impression, 5.
Man, is that girl on the right going to stick that whole thing in her mouth? That could be a compelling image right there.
Sharpness, constrast, and B&W treatment seem appropriate. Composition leaves something to be desired though, I feel like there is too much empty space around the sides. It'd be one thing if it gave a sense of place, but they seem to be sitting by a fence. Just cropping out the right side (from her backpack on) and a little from the left (from his cone on) would make the image more visually pleasing, I think.
This is obviously a candid, but even candids need to be centered around an idea. In this case, I find the guy on the left distracting, because he's not eating. The image has its interesting points (the two girls) but I don't think the guy adds much. An extreme crop of just the two girls' faces and hands (or just the girl on the right) might be interesting. It wouldn't do as well on DPC (voter don't seem to like gross as much) but it'd get the point across.
So, yeah, I'll stick with a 5. You have something here, but it needed a tighter crop to really drive the point home.
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