Flaming Liquid Metal
by mbardeen

Comment by jdavis:
I would lighten the picture slightly overall. Nice photo.

"Scream"
by mbardeen

Comment by dasser:
Wow. A well timed and framed shot. How many did it take you and did you use burst mode?

"Scream"
by mbardeen

Comment by casualguy:
Can almost hear them myself! Good subject, well titled.

"Scream"
by mbardeen

Comment by wewillexplore:
Interesting shot here - the crop on the bottom and left leaves us looking for more of the ride - my eyes are wandering off the page since I can't see what they are about to hit.

"Scream"
by mbardeen

Comment by adine:
Hee, hee! Fun! There is sound all over the place in this picture. I like the composition with the curve coming over the top - sound surround us and the action that provokes the screams is obvious. The stucture at the bottom might be distracting, but I feel it provides balance and makes the viewer wonder what curves and loops these poor screamers are going into next. Wish it could have been sharp or more blurred with motion, but I'm just being
a little picky now. 8

Flaming Liquid Metal
by mbardeen

Comment by gaja_tz:
it looks like out of focus. IMO you should be making some better composition and perspective. In this case it is not so obviously what is in the spoon. = 4

"Scream"
by mbardeen

Comment by Morgan:
Sounds everywhere. 8 Morgan

Flaming Liquid Metal
by mbardeen

Comment by BobsterLobster:
You seem to have gone to a lot of trouble in getting this shot, so it's a shame that you didn't capture it better! Nice idea, but there is too much going on in the rest of the picture in the way of textures that takes away from the subject. I think you could have benefited from more lighting on the spoon. 4

Flaming Liquid Metal
by mbardeen

Comment by mcrael:
The liquid on the spoon is just a little too dark to identify.

Just Beyond
by mbardeen

Comment by cpanaioti:
I came back to finish the critique but for some reason the edit and quote buttons both returned a 404 error. Excuse the dual entries. (I created the quote manually)

Originally posted by cpanaioti: *Critique Club* General: Overall I like the choice of subject, clouds. They have a lot of texture. Composition: This image seems very flat. Unfortunately, due to the tight crop one gets the feeling that the clouds are billowing out of the bridge. More space is required on the bottom and to the right to balance the image. One way to accomplish this is to choose a vantage point that still allows for the photo to be mostly clouds but also includes enough of the bridge to give the image a 3D feel. Exposure: The clouds could possibly be exposed a touch more to provide more detail. The bridge being under exposed, lacks detail. By using a graduated filter you could have exposed the bridge more without blowing out the clouds. This would reduce the flatness of the image. Using a graduated red filter would both help with exposure as well as with contrast.

Impact: The clouds caught my eye first but there is not really anything to draw the viewer into the image. The bridge acts as a barrier.


Edit now works again.....

I need to check the brightness of my monitor at home. I'm looking at this again at work and you captured a lot of detail in the bridge though I'd still like to see a bit more of it. I will stick with the suggestion of a graduated filter to keep the sky from getting washed out while allowing a slower shutter speed or smaller aperture.


Well done.

Message edited by author 2003-06-05 08:42:23.