Bedroom in the morning
by jmespiga

Comment by Giles:
sorry just does nothing for me, doesnt draw me in to find a hiding child or some detail, its just meh a snap shot of an unmade bed and yeah tracy emin won teh turned price with an unmade bed but this isnt modern art or the tate gallery! its washed out by the light on the left, dark in the details on the right.

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Comment by MinsoPhoto:
Greetings from the Critique Club

First Impressions:

Is that this is a very dull and flat shot. Nothing really grabs my attention except for the uniqueness of the subject. I am just ready to go on to the next photo as there doesn̢۪t seem to be anything here to hold my attention.

Technical (Comp, lighting, color, focus, Processing):

The composition on this really doesn̢۪t work well, I would like to see more of an angle perhaps or maybe not cropping it in so tight and adding something else to the shot to give this some perspective. As it is I don̢۪t know if this subject is 2 inches tall or 10 feet tall.

The lighting is quite poor as well but it doesn̢۪t look like you used your on camera flash which was wise as that would have likely just cast a harsh light and likely a lot of glare. If possible I would have liked to see side lighting on this. Best investment that can be made for a new photographer is off camera lighting. Just starting with a bounce flash that you can take off the camera and position where you want it can really work wonders.

The color on this is quite bland but I think the bigger issue is that there is no real contrast at all as some of the commenter mentioned. The focus also seems just a bit soft. Either try and get the whole thing tack sharp or if you want to focus on just one area use a low f-stop and make that area sharp with the rest intentionally blurred. As is it just seems slightly blurred.

Not sure if you really did any post processing on this except for resize. As mentioned by Yo_Spiff levels, curves, saturation, contrast, sharpening etc. would likely enhance this shot.

Challenge:

This meets the challenge and you were very creative in your choice of subject which likely got you a few higher votes.

Artistic/Emotion:

As mentioned your subject choice was creative and it is nice to see out of the ordinary subjects.

Summary:

This was a good idea but it just fell flat. Keep up with your creative eye and just work on the technical and you will continue to grow as an artist. Also if you enjoy the comments you are receiving it is helpful to mark the comments as helpful. This shows those leaving the comments that you are thankful for them and they will likely leave more.

Tube man
by jmespiga

Comment by Yo_Spiff:
Cool subject, but the photo needs some adjustments to give it a little more pop. levels, curves, saturation, contrast, sharpening etc.

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Comment by Ter:
clever

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Comment by Luci11e:
Someone put alot of work into that creation but the photo doesn't do much for me. Seems to be laying kind of flat; perhaps could have used a differnt type of lighting?

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Comment by andrewt:
Lighting very bland , a little more contrast could help a little I feel.

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Comment by AlinNZ:
Wee seen..could do with more contrast.

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Comment by EL-ROI:
The focus is off a little or it is not quite sharp.

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Comment by burfino:
There seems to be a focus problem here. Cool find, though.

The old Via Apia
by jmespiga

Comment by Koriyama:
Wow! You could have used a Holga for this!