Leave Me Breathlessby
fotomann_foreverComment by theSaj: ::: Critique Club ::: [The Saj]
First Impressions: Attractive, sensational, almost 30'ish.
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Composition: The composition is quite nice, strangely one of the few aspects that bother me with the composition is the position of her right thumb. Note how it's pointing up and the nail shows it's sharpness just a touch too much. I think it might be useful to make a mental note in future shots to lay the nail flat. But that's a minor point. The right fore finger also becomes a bit distracting as it goes beyond the frame but just the tip returns back into the fame. I am also slightly bothered by the cut-off of the right eyebrow. I find myself wanting just a bit more in the crop.
Subject: Excellent subject, nicely positioned. Especiallyt the fingers of the left hand. Good expression. I am bothered by the background material. THe colore is very applicable to the shot but the "crumpled" texture becomes distracting, especially when contrasted to the soft feel of the main subject.
Technical (Colour, focus, and light): I appreciate the tones and like the almost soft focus feel. I think the lighting has provided for very nice color capture though question the shadows in the upper right corner and whether an additional light source to soften the shadows might have benefited the shot.
One aspect that needs some adjustment with regards to the lighting is near the models nose. The left side of which has lost distinguish ability and detail. It is almost in need of some shading as it becomes hard for the eye to compose. The lighting needs to be altered slightly to help emphasize the shape of the model's nose slightly.
There is some slight over-exposure (particularly in areas where the oil has caused a very bright shine). This causes some loss of details.
Creativity: I think this was a fairly creative and entertaining pose that you have captured.
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Summary: I find this photo overall to be nicely pleasing. I like the towns and enjoyed critiquing it. There are a few minor aspects that give room for improvement
To improve?: I've already mentioned a few areas with lighting/shadows, and the finger positions. One other aspect that I notice are the lips. You've captured superb color and detail in the lower lip, and it stands out vibrantly. Sensual. However, the models teeth show unevenly and the upper lip is not as distinguished as it might be. Of course, there are all minor points on a very exquisite photo.
Nice work.....
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It is my hope that these insights are helpful, and constructive. If you have any questions regarding this critique, please feel free to PM me.
- Jason "The Saj"
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