The Silent Eyes Of The Sightless, Watchingby
cogeroxComment by zaflabout: Greetings from the critique club,
something in this picture does not work for me, i can't really put my finger on it:
technically , your BW conversion is perfect, and the focus is great.
but the composition really hurt the image in my opinion, a wider angle perhaps would have given this more impact, the focus is too much on the manequin (who is lifeless).
But as i am gazing at the shot, my eye gets pulled to the man walking on the right side, and i wonder what's the story and what's the link. i read the title i get it, but then the manequin is not looking at anything, the man is completly off the field of view. so i think it would have been better if there was a person in front of the store, and you composed your shot to include him , that also could have had more impact.
as for content , you have a great idea, and with a better execution(composition) i think this could have scored much higher.
hope that comment was helpfull,
cheers,
Hassan
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