Kali
by Shea927

Comment by tapcity:
lovely girl and color notes add to the mood 7

Kali
by Shea927

Comment by tjbel05:
IMHO I really feel like there is too much going on here to be considered Negative Spaces, sorry.

darc&deb2.jpg
by Shea927

Comment by howzitboy:
yeah focus on the lady is wayy to soft. And that shadow going across their chest is really distracting. i love the soft brown color tone to the shot tho, really seems to fit this scene. But darn it, just with she was in focus.....

Reflections
by Shea927

Comment by karmat:
CRITIQUE CLUB CRITIQUE
by karmat

Great idea for a shot! I like how you have managed to divide the frame into thirds instead of halves, and still maintain the symmetry component. That is not always easy or effective.

Technically, the focus is very good, but the lighting seems a bit flat. Since it was overcast, you didn't have to deal with harsh shadows, which is good, but as a result, you don't have any shadows, so there is very little depth into the picture. I think if you could have blurred the back wall, it would have helped. As it is, it almost seems as if everything in the picture is equally focused, and that can detract from the main subject.

For some reason, I really like that she is barefooted. That just gives a sense of calmness and realness to the shot.

Good work, and best to you in future challenges. If I need to clarify or explain myself more, please feel free to contact me.

karma

Pear Blossoms
by Shea927

Comment by PaulE:
Greetings from the Critique Club.

Hi Hannah,

I think you have had some useful comments on this already (and soem less so). I would like to start with the positive - you have put together a lovely composition, I especially like the sense of depth and the curve of the lives from the top right towards the bottome left.

You have had a few comments to the effect that it is not sharp enough/too soft or out-of-focus. I note that you put in the soft focus (I suspect you did the same with yout triptych entry). The main problem to me seems to be that there is no clear focal point to really enage the viewer. I would love to see this image with just the front blossom in sharp focus and the rest as it is. With perhaps a slighty tighter crop on the left. Then the flow of the lines would lead the eye to the focal point. Maybe.

There are also a few comments on your choice to go for B&W. The tona contrast of the image certianly does look flat, but that doesn't mean going for B&W was a mistake. What method did you use to convert to B&W? I recommend first finding out which channel has the best contrast, and then using the channel mixer to convert to greyscale.

It is my hope that these insights are helpful and constructive. Please feel free to PM me if you have any questions regarding this critique. And please remember to mark it "Helpful" if you found it so. Good luck with future challenges.

Cheers
Paul

Spring Flowers
by Shea927

Comment by Beautiful-Joe:
O.O
I gave this a nine.
I am shocked it placed this low!
Fantastic try, anyways..
Wow..
That's a real bummer.
You did fantasticly, Shea927.
I like it.

(ETA: Misspelled your username. =P)

Message edited by author 2007-05-07 14:20:39.

Pear Blossoms
by Shea927

Comment by Chinarosepetal:
Good composition, but the soft focus and lack of tonal range don't help this image.

Spring Flowers
by Shea927

Comment by Candi20:
The fact that there is nothing in focus in this really hurts the picture. If the tulips were in focus it would be an awesome shot!

Spring Flowers
by Shea927

Comment by TooCool:
I am a huge fan of the soft focus effect, but this just seems to be out of focus...
TC

Spring Flowers
by Shea927

Comment by LN13:
Sadly out of focus. And what's with the white edge on the right?