At a lighted table
by bjoern

Comment by Ecce_Signum:
Greetings from Andi via the Critique Club

First Impression: Meets the challenge well, I like the composition and the oof background. Nice sharp focus on the eyes but the rest of his face is a little soft.

Composition: I think you have a strong composition and I quite like the bright light on the bottom left however the yellowish bright spot bottom right is a little offputting for me.

Tecnical: I see you went to a workshop to shoot this and am guessing lighting from below was part of the course? Its not the best angle for lighting a portrait however I think it works quite well here. I think the exposure is a off as (on my monitor) your subject looks a little jaundiced. Some catchlight to bring out his hair detail would help this I think.

Artistic: I think you have approached this portrait shoot well and I like the fact the model is at an angle to the camera yet looking down the lens, it adds interest to the shot.

Overall thoughts: I quite like this shot as a portrait and feel it may be a bit 'run of the mill' for the dpc voters. I think it place about right at just above the challenge average.

At a lighted table
by bjoern

Comment by Chinarosepetal:
It's a great portrait and the space on the left is great too, don't change a thing, just be proud of it :):)

Look
by bjoern

Comment by macrothing:



Critique Club Critique

First Impressions
Hmm, seems a tourist type shot at a bridge or similar - but even so, could still classify as Street Photography, however there are not enough people in focus, or at least where the eye first rests, to create the interest.

Photograph Information, Technicals & Composition Review
Ok, just read your comments - if your favorite part of the image was the two people at the front, I don't understand why you didn't allow them 'center stage' more. The OOF (out of focus) areas dominate the image too much and cause a distraction from these two. Aside from that, with everyone looking down, and the man pointing down, the mind wants to either 'see down' or at least have some space leading down within the frame.

A more refined crop would also have helped. Perhaps even a very bold one, bringing the girl's distant look into play.

Comments, Score & Placement Review
98/135 seems a little harsh, perhaps - but your last commenter provides some very good insight into your image.

Summary
Possibly good potential with the image as is, but would likely take a bold crop and some tweaking in pp to enhance & portray the 'moment'.

At a lighted table
by bjoern

Comment by MonsterPhotography:
really nice shot. Nice and sharpe and the eyes stand out. Try recropping it to loose some of that space to the left to loose that light in the and to concentrate your eyes on the subject. A third should do it.

Silhouette
by bjoern

Comment by aKiwi:
I just saw this.

Congratulations on a new Personal best!

At a lighted table
by bjoern

Comment by albc28:
I think you could have benefitted from better light. Lighting from below isn't that great for this shot.

Look
by bjoern

Comment by AJSullivan:
I like the DOF, but that fella pointing, he immediately draws the eye to him, and the in focused girl becomes a distraction, if that makes sense.

Look
by bjoern

Comment by bcenu:
Great clarity in the subject and good use of DOF.

Look
by bjoern

Comment by VivaLaAlexander:
I really love the focus in this one. Great capture. 7

Here Comes the Sun
by bjoern

Comment by boothefam:
A little washed out in the petals, but otherwise quite good.