Leda
by Rino63

Comment by snaffles:
Greetings from the Critique Club!

What I see here is an excellent idea where the execution needs some work. The profile is not quite a full profile, nor is it quite 3/4 profile, though you may have ended up with a more interesting shot in 3/4 profile.

It looks as though she is being lit by light coming in through a window, which works well. However that light falls off quickly, and at 1/40 there is little chance for the light to reach further back and illuminate more. Also the top of the head vanishes into the background.

I would suggest a reflector of some sort, which would bounce the ambient light back towards her face. In this case, from probably the area of her right shoulder. You can easily make one out of tinfoil and cardboard, as I have in the past! If you have a tripod, put it to use, and if you use a reflector - play around with it a little, see what works for you - stay with your current settings. If the reflector starts to give you some glare, close down your fstop or increase the shutter speed.

Hope this critique/tutorial has been of help. She reminds me of my paternal grandmother, who was from Andalusia. Her face is full of experiences and stories.

Feel free to PM me with any questions,

Susan

Along the river
by Rino63

Comment by JokersSoul:
The sky in this is gorgeous. The boats are a bit distracting and take away from the trees in the image (IMO).

March, 8th
by Rino63

Comment by macrothing:
3 - Interesting head of hair and little nails - stronger with more off the top in my opinion.

March, 8th
by Rino63

Comment by MinsoPhoto:
interesting and different. I like this shot.

March, 8th
by Rino63

Comment by see:
Young lady has nice hair, nicely emotive..

March, 8th
by Rino63

Comment by Louis:
That's a lot of hair. But it isn't telling me anything I don't already know, which is, in my view, the definition of fine art.

March, 8th
by Rino63

Comment by bspurgeon:
Yeah, this could be be a [user]Art_Roflmao[/user] special. Glorious curls!

Laundry time
by Rino63

Comment by macrothing:
PS
I also noticed the 'time' connection (but not until after I had done the CCC & didn't have time to comment then). Just wanted to let you know that I did see that as well.

Laundry time
by Rino63

Comment by macrothing:


Critique Club Critique

First Impressions
An odd image, with a little abstract thrown in, along with some creativity, however the black dominates too much in my opinion.

Photograph Information, Technicals & Composition Review
I think your technicals are good, for it appears you were trying to achieve - perhaps trying to minimize that black background may have helped, somehow. I guess you wanted the laundry to be OOF and/or shallow, creating the abstract, however perhaps more focus on it may have driven a stronger message, who knows.

Comments, Score & Placement Review
96/125 is pretty low down the pack, I think this may have been a bit 'out there' for most. You have 'two in one' for the framing aspect of the Challenge, which is quite good - but still, for me, as mentioned, a little 'odd' overall. I didn't vote in this Challenge.

A total score of 7.5 from your three commentors shows that they did like it, despite one showing you their score of less than that.

Summary
Perhaps the angle of the mirror also made this a little strange and difficult for people to connect with - it wasn't strange enough perhaps, and 'next time', maybe the set up and/or execution may be improved and produce a stronger image.

edit: wording

Message edited by author 2010-03-10 22:22:59.

March, 8th
by Rino63

Comment by kleski:
I don't get it