Window in to the sky (from the something old challenge )by
facesastheycomeComment by kari1: ::: Critique Club :::
Hi, my name is Kari and from the critique club.
First Impression - the most important one:
Interesting choice for a reshoot ... not sure I would have been brave enough to reshoot a top 15 shot ... but well done.
Subject:
you did this .. and took into account the comments you recieved at that time ... that is what the challenge was about.
Composition:
Compared to the orginal ... I think that the distant crop .. rather than the close crop is what didn't really work here as well ... the orginal, although fairly centred worked well showing the sky in the background and the crop up close to the window framed it without too much other stuff ... in this new shot .. the window is full .. and the wall itself creates a really busy image ... if you had just recropped with a slight ommph towards the right maybe that would have worked better than enlarging and engaging more surface area.
Technical (Colour and light):
The colours are extremely different and so amazing ... it is hard to tell how reall or saturated they are ... I like the narural light and the shadows on the wall (bottom left) ... but the details is almost lost from the slab below the window .. whereas last time the texture in it added quite substantially to the picture.
To grow its vote?:
Again a closer crop ..maybe not all the way ... but maybe half again of this .... think about the background (cut down that growing tree :} ) as the sky added a different dimension and less business last time.
Summary:
Good work ... keep it up . .I know you are always improving.
If you've got any questions about this critique, please feel free to contact me via the PM system.
Cheers
Kari
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