Polythene Pam
by Aghris

Comment by fotomann_forever:
::: Greetings from Critique Club :::

Hi, as requested, here is an indepth critique of your submission.

First Impression - the most important one:
Neat shot and I like the plastic look you seem to have been trying to achieve. She doesn't look much like a man though ;-)

Composition:
I like the square crop, but I think I want to see it a little less tight. It's sorta feeling crowded the way it is.

Subject:
Clear, in your face and works well.

Technical (Color, focus, and light):
Color: A bit warm for my tastes, but not overly distracting.
Focus: Focus looks sharp, but perhaps could stand a little more USM in post.
Light: I like it, it works well for you, other than beinga bit warm.

To grow its vote?:
I'm sure you got voted down a bit for the Neat Image, overprocessing. Not really anyway around that with what you were trying to do. That's more the fault of the voters. Colling the WB might have helped some as would a bit less crowded composition.

Summary:
Cool shot, shows creativity.

Hope to see more from you soon,
Leroy

Polythene Pam
by Aghris

Comment by Melethia:
Love the overly "plastic" appearance of the model and her expression is a kick! Nicely done, and a great interpretation of the challenge.

A day at the Green
by Aghris

Comment by FocusPoint:
Green it is :P

Polythene Pam
by Aghris

Comment by lynnesite:
This is perfect! I love the overprocessing's tie in to your title.

Polythene Pam
by Aghris

Comment by Cyberdragon:
Clever use of the parasol

Making the target
by Aghris

Comment by HBunch:
*Critique Club*

The very first thing that comes to mind when I see this is the thumbnail. It's a strange dark color and it looks like it's been smashed in the car door or something. Very odd look, and it draws my attention right away.
Next, is the selective color treatment. Very effective in drawing the attention to the color parts (money) and taking the attention mostly away from the hand/arm.
This does look like it meets the challenge. I don't know how much money that is, so I cannot determine how much success it represents, but i'll take your word for it that it's a good amount of money and the person was successful in something.
Focus is soft on the hand, and crisp on the money. I think I might have preferred the entire photo to be a crisp focus. Then again, it might just be the grainy look that causes it to look less crisp. I would prefer more uniform focus.
I like the angle and framing/cropping. The hand in the center of the photo does not bother me here. A lot of times it doesn't work, but I think with the money coming out of both sides of the hand, it works to have the arm coming from the center of the photo.
Lighting looks a tad bright in some areas, especially on the sleeve, but nothing serious. I might have preferred that toned down a bit, but really not something that HAS to be done.
Overall, I think the image is technically good, but lacking on the interest. It doesn't really draw me in and hold me for much longer than a minute. Interesting, but low visual appeal.
Good shot for success.
~Heather~

Polythene Pam
by Aghris

Comment by UNCLEBRO:
it looks like you've caught her eyes at a bad moment.
maybe you meant to do it?
I don't know!!!

Polythene Pam
by Aghris

Comment by davmct:
WAY WAY WAY too much neat image
i understand you want a plastic look, but woah, this was a bit much especially around her eyes. the skin i could see, but you've lost all definition around the eyes and the lips

Polythene Pam
by Aghris

Comment by hotpasta:
well done...looks plastic and so it should

Polythene Pam
by Aghris

Comment by graphicfunk:
Expression and color are tops here. Bump.