But I am none; nor will my sun renew.by
posthumousComment by see: Greetings from the Critique Club.
Hi Don.
I am Alan :), and you are my first Critique, please bear with me as I feel as a fly in a tarantulas den.
On first viewing, and reading the poem twice, I gather both title and image where combined intentionally at the time of capture. Both fit too well together for it to be a accident. The background fits well with the mood. The leaf on the right drawing the eye down the long trail the lonely man must travel alone. The hand err the fingers grasping the sun attempting to prevent it from reaching higher in the sky, preventing it becoming spring. This was well thought out, and executed, and a fine job capturing the essence of both.
Now for the other part, yes I see a couple. The mood is dark, depressed, love lost. I think bringing the brights down a bit might convey the mood a bit better, though might not have helped with the average voter.
And the err ummm hand is ummm a bit too nice, for want of another word. This man has no desire to interact with anyone, so deep and dark his mood, he will go to the point of repelling others (bum like) to prevent it.
Had I voted this challenge a 7 or 8, if curiosity had me looking for the poem (likely) 9 or 10.
A critique of my critique is more than welcome..
Alan