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Comment by inspzil:
Greetings from the Critique Club
By Inspzil

Composition - I'm jealous that you have green plants. We really don't yet. This looks like a nice place to walk, but honestly really isn't a lot going on here. It's not that I feel this is a bad composition, just a little incomplete, like it needs a little something. I think if you used this as a backdrop for a photo it would've went over a little better. The board walk is a good leading line, but leading to what? My feeling about this scene is that it is lacking visual impact. The viewers really could use something to focus on and fill the role of "subject"

Technique - You mention something about being hammered for the shallow DOF. I have nothing against a shallow DOF if done right. This one could have worked for you. Lacking a subject really makes it hard. The reason I think its hard is that a shallow DOF is a technique of selective focus.... How do you select a point to focus in a photo where there is no dominant focal point? Am I making any sense? The technique to force the viewers to make the boardwalk the dominant focal point is to really key in on it at the closest point to the viewer. So let's say we'll shove the pic to the left 50cm and include the entire width of the walk in the entire width of the picture. Then we'll focus on the 2nd board in and take the pic. My personal rule about shallow DOF is not to let the foreground get too blurry as it will attract the viewers attention immediately. If it is a little blurry, I feel I can get away with it if the subject is compelling enough. Okay, this is getting long... The exposure is very well done and the framing could use the little adjustments that I stated above. That's the way I see this picture being the most successful.

Overall - At first I really thought you needed a subject, but looking at it, it has some similarities to my Transportation pic that i didn't get entered in time. //www.pbase.com/image/16096827 This may not be where you want to go with this pic. But maybe it is. Either way, good luck and keep that camera busy. - Inspzil

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Comment by jjbeguin:
Nice combinnation of texture and clean ccomposition. One of the only ones this week with appropriate framing. 9

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Comment by bamaster:
I'm not totally sure what is on the left there, but I like the contrast in textures and shapes. I think this might have been interesting in color as well.

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Comment by robbieh:
Wow! I like this, neat textures that keep my eyes roving around taking everything in.

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Comment by ddenny:
Is this taken at a Marriott resort in Florida, by chance? If so, I walked this same path last Fall. Very wild back there!

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Comment by crabappl3:
Great play with the shadows. I like your overall feel and tone to this shot.

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Comment by ursula:
Good composition, good use of B/W. Possibly a stronger outside border? There seems to be a slight white line at the bottom of the third (bottom right) picture - it's distracting. Also, I'm left wondering what's at the bottom left - possibly the bottom picture could be cropped to fit the whole of the bottom section?

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Comment by lisae:
I like the composition of the path. It takes me on a little journey through the photo. I think it lacks something though. Even with all that perspective, the photo feels a little flat.

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Comment by karmat:
The leading of the bridge through the picture is effective, I think. And you definitely have "flora." Nice work.

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Comment by kiwiness:
This is a good image showing flora taking over again. I like this a lot because it is telling me a story, you have a good idea, well done.