North Island Kaka - (Nestor Meridionalis)by
KiwiShotzComment by kari1: ::: Greetings from Critique Club :::
Hi, as requested, here is an in-depth critique of your submission.
First Impression - the most important one:
This a very good capture of this bird in flight. Nice action shot.
Composition:
Not as strong as it could be. The most distracting part of the composition is that the bird has nowhere to fly. Objects in motion in a composition need room to continue their path. Another composition flaw that this is creating is that the wing cuts the image almost directly in half, violating the Rule of Thirds.
Subject:
Subject is nice and well defined by light level differences. I̢۪d like to see a bit less DoF, but I see this was shot with a P&S camera, so that expectation is hard to meet. Overall, though subject is good.
Technical (Color, focus, and light):
Focus is sharp and detail is clear.
Color – It’s ok, but may have been washed out a bit due to a bit too much flash. Maybe boosting saturation in Post-processing would help.
Light – a bit too much flash, but overall lighting is good.
To grow its vote?:
Not entirely sure this convinced the voters that the bird was wild. A bit less crop might have convinced them, but I̢۪m not sure how well that would have worked either.
Summary:
Nice action shot, needs a bit of work on composition, but overall was a nice capture.
Hope to see more from you soon,
Leroy
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