Mountians.jpg
by angela_packard

Comment by sevilduvarci:
i like the composition. the mountains look a bit dark tho.

Pick Me, Pick Me!
by angela_packard

Comment by PaulE:
Greetings from the Critique Club.

Hello again Angela,

The excitement, joy and sense of fun that this shot conveys is simply fantastic. You have done a wonderful job of capturing and conveying the the wonderful experience the girls are so clearly enjoying. You can see how intense and involved everyone is. Brilliant.

You have clearly met the challenge, and in doing so created an interesting and engaging image. So why the relatively low score? Personally I agree that it was 'shockingly underrated'. I like the composition and the point of view. In terms of composition the only things I would have liked different would be: exclude the boy on the right who isn't interested, include the adult males foot, and include the whole of the little girl on the left. The ceiling lights are distracting but to exclude them you would have to have shot downwards from higher up, which would have caused you to lose your connection with the children.

The colours are a bit flat. I see that in the post-processing you have performed the steps I would recommend. Is that the order you performed the pp in? If so, then I would recommend you move the resizing to the end of your work-flow to preserve the detail as long as possible. Also consider what you were doing in terms of White-Balance. Have you experimented with shooting in RAW to have better control over this?

I'm still confused by the technical details you have entered. I am convinced that you are entering shutter and aperture in the opposite fields. In this instance it is clear that the shutter-speed could not have been 3.2 seconds.

I hope my comments help and Good Luck in future Challenges!

Cheers
Paul

Black Mailing My Husband
by angela_packard

Comment by Pedxer:
Thats quite a party!

Black Mailing My Husband
by angela_packard

Comment by keone:
Looks like my kind of party. You should post some more of these.

Not for Hire - Motorhome
by angela_packard

Comment by posthumous:
nice composition. my first impulse was that I wanted a tighter crop so that the truck would challenge the sky for dominance (the reflection in the truck is its own turbulent sky), but on second look this works, too. The uncentered square within a square is a pleasing composition, and the "horizons" match up.

Black Mailing My Husband
by angela_packard

Comment by Mark:
well, it's too late now.

Black Mailing My Husband
by angela_packard

Comment by rinac:
Busted!! Fun shot :)

Lense Collection
by angela_packard

Comment by PaulE:
Greetings from the Critique Club.

Hi Angela,

I have really admired some of your work in the past so it is great to get draw you for a critique. Sadly this one doesn\'t grab me like some of your other shots. That said I have found it extremely difficult to put my finger on what doesn\'t work. The following critique is my best shot at what has been a difficult job (pushing the boundaries of my own understanding).

I\'m a little confused by the technical details. An Aperture of 1/60 seems odd to me. Have you entered aperture and shutter-speed in the wrong boxes?

Taking my lead from the other commentators - theis shot is very dark. Nothing wrong with a dark shot and good use of negative space, but it does put a huge responsibility on having some aspect of the shot to really draw the viewer in. I think this is what is lacking here. as my eye flicks from lens to lens my mind is thinking, \'So?\'.

The lighting is what lets you down most - to me it looks linear, direct from the camera. It does nothing to add depth or subtelty to your shot. I\'m no professional on the subject (by any means), but I think you would have wanted a stronger, difused light-source at a lower angle. Although as I say, what do I know.

I think the POV does nothing for this shot. As it stands the angle of the lenses draws my eye off the image. Two lines are created, one along the bottom of the lenses and one along the top, which together expand from the bottom right out to the top left; in fact out of the top left. I would have much preferred a lower point of view and moved round to the right more, perhaps with the lens order reversed. I think this would have brought the eye in and the change in perspective would have emphasised the lenses as a subject more.

I hope this has been useful.

Cheers
Paul

Pick Me, Pick Me!
by angela_packard

Comment by gsal:
Great capture and shocking underrated IMO. Perphafs a B&W version would have given you higher score but you can be proud of the photo.

Judging
by angela_packard

Comment by KevinRiggs:
Great idea and fantastic execution.