Living in a Circle
by aporagen

Comment by Chinarosepetal:
Critique Club

First impressions
Something a bit different for a DPC entry, good title for the challenge.

After a bit
This is a lovely environmental portrait, I disagree that you should have got closer, we need to see the man and his world for us to engage properly with him. It is a shame that a few of his toes missed being caught in the shot, and the (unavoidably) harsh light means we've lost some of his face to shadow, but this isn't a studio portrait - what you saw is what we got and I like it.

Overall
A bold shot for this challenge, I like the composition and I'm glad to see it scored reasonably well.
Well done :)

Living in a Circle
by aporagen

Comment by shutterpuppy:
Should have gotten closer.

Living in a Circle
by aporagen

Comment by liberty:
Great shot! 10.

Living in a Circle
by aporagen

Comment by Ja-9:
pictures like this makes me wonder how some people ever survive...well done

Living in a Circle
by aporagen

Comment by nibbles:
great picture,makes you feel lucky for what you have.

Living in a Circle
by aporagen

Comment by Cheerz:
Harsh living conditions.. I would have gone for a close up.. with the subject to the right.. looking towards the left... As it is now, the photo looks loopsided.

Living in a Circle
by aporagen

Comment by littlebusybee:
this is really stark for me. I like how you have taken the topic and related it so strongly to real life. no bubbles or flowers just reality. 9

The Three Musketeers
by aporagen

Comment by bspurgeon:
Hello from the Crtique Club

First Impression: An interesting group of young people waisting away a summer day walking the tracks. I like the open ended story. It let's my mind wander.

Composition: As is, good. I think it may have been made stronger by extending the top right of the frame to get a vanishing point from the tracks. I believe that would add more to the story that you have begun. I see that you are shooting with the 5DmkII, so I presume that this was with the 24-105L. 24-30mm would have captured more track. However, it is quite possible that there are buildings, etc, beyond the trees, and a wider perspective would have ruined the scene.

DOF/Exposure: It appears you were shooting in low light or shade given the ISO. With that shutter speed I believe you could have extended the depth of field to bring in more of the 3 child. However, this may not have been your intent, but he seems stuck somewhere in between the foreground and background. Overall the image seems to have strong contrast on the kids. Maybe a bit brighter.

Overall, I like this photograph, there is a great story here, and I love the open ended quality.

Good luck with your next entry!

Cheers,

Ben

Superficial Colors
by aporagen

Comment by unbreakable:
he said "I am who I am and nothing more" nice portrait.

Superficial Colors
by aporagen

Comment by hotpasta:
I think a tighter crop/close up would have been better...colour is nice and punchy