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Comment by puma:
The composition is nice but the DOF could be a bit deaper. I think the flower should have been more in focus. Nice set-up though.

One Common Goal
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Comment by CLarson557:
The kid's uniforms seem to be a little oversaturated. Otherwise, this is a nicely composed photograph.

One Common Goal
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Comment by mycelium:
hahah, that dude on the right is great! I have no idea what he's doing!

One Common Goal
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Comment by TG73:
nice colors

Understanding Comes Slowly
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Comment by Di:
**Critique Club**

shutterpunk
Pentax *ist D

This is a well composed photograph, with the calligrapher framed by his work.
As this is advanced editing, improvements to this photo would have been to clone or crop out the sunlight in the left side and using something to reflect that light to the calligrapher or by working with your brightness and contrast to bring him out and make him the focus of the picture. Those are the only two areas I can see that need improvement on.

Congratulations on a very nice photo :)

One Common Goal
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Comment by andri:
Yes, they have a goal but do they have a common destination?
The guy to the right is funny but I don't like how the photograph cuts acroos the leg and the hand of the frontmost guy in the line. You should have backed away slightly to be able to include him in the picture.

Understanding Comes Slowly
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Comment by eschelar:
Yeah! Gotta love white guys writing shufa. I haven't practiced in a long while either. This guy is GOOD. Nice table too.

I guess he knows his hand position is off for Chinese style writing. I don't know what the Japanese influence has been on it though. Proof is in the pudding though.

I would have liked it even better if he was writing characters that had more direct meaning to your title too.

Edit: looks like there is no support for chinese characters in posts...

Message edited by author 2005-09-19 22:14:04.

One Common Goal
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Comment by typologic:
japan? i really like the inclusion of the guy to the right. he has great enthusiasm! :)

One Common Goal
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Comment by Tammer:
I like the expression you captured on the coach (?) I can almost feel them straining.

Understanding Comes Slowly
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Comment by Portia_N:
interesting photo