The Outskirts
by RulerZigzag

Comment by bspurgeon:
Critique Club

First, I enjoyed your portfolio, plenty of good work. Particularly this!

FIRST IMPRESSION:
Does not grab, as you said, bit out of the box for what I was expecting for street.

COMPOSITION:
Excellent. The right building is positioned well. The inclusion of the distant buildings buried in dark hurts IMO.

TECHNICAL:
I really like the way you capture the detailed lighting of the main building. Highlights it's texture. Drawback...the bright lights far off on the leading lines. Visual competition!

You know, when I sit here looking through the photograph, I'm drawn to the architecture of the main building, and for that reason it does not feel *street*. But you knew that based on your comments in the description. :)

Cheers,

Ben

The Outskirts
by RulerZigzag

Comment by AJSullivan:
I wouldn't say this falls under street photography.

The Outskirts
by RulerZigzag

Comment by bcenu:
Nice night shot. Would have liked it cropped a little more at the top.

Wonder if you'll ever see the sun
by RulerZigzag

Comment by snaffles:
Greetings from the Critique Club!

Initial impression: Not familiar with the song itself, but the sunset shot says enough. Hard to get a fix on it in terms of place, doesn't look like a big-city skyline.

Technical: Good use of ambient light, a little glare from sun, use of thirds good with the low horizon. Like the underlit cloud on the right.

Artistic: I like the boats' silhouettes on the water, help add interest and depth to the shot.

Overall: Would have liked to see this with a slightly faster aperture, like 1/40 or 1/50.

Feel free to pm me with any questions,

Susan

The Outskirts
by RulerZigzag

Comment by kellyo:
Too far away to show the people and what they are doing. I like the light on the building to the right.

The Outskirts
by RulerZigzag

Comment by AP:
Looks like a set of miniatures.... I really like the color balance and how it doesn't quite seem like night. Would love to see this image at a larger scale. Gonna go with a 9 GL

Wonder if you'll ever see the sun
by RulerZigzag

Comment by DJWoodward:
Challenge Relevance:6 Impact/Emotion/Mood:6 Technicals:7 Processing:5.5 Creativity:5.5

Stranger in a strange land
by RulerZigzag

Comment by marklovell:
::: Critique Club :::

First Impressions: Interesting, and busy photo. Looks good in B&W.

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Composition:
Is pretty good. I am bothered by the return of the nearest handrail - that it is not parallel to the bottom of the picture, and personally it feels as though the very bottom of the shot has been cropped a little short. There is obviously no horizon as such in this photo, but as both of the wall/ground lines are in perspective, you might get away with making the return of the handrail your perspective line?
My eye is drawn into the lower right section - where the guy is, but I am more distracted by the shadow on the wall to his left (perhaps this is because I work in theatre and it's my job to notice that sort of thing...)


Technical (Colour, focus, and light):
I am struggling a little to find the exact focus point, but I think it's just the camera side of the guy (who to me feels like he should be the focus point of the photo). Putting it on him would help to put the handrail out of focus more and then it would probably bug me less.
I like the light falling on the front of the guy, and I like the glow on the underside of the saucer.

I am wondering whether a lower viewpoint might allow you to remove the 'Cosi' signs from the background (by hiding them behind the saucer). Whilst I realise it's a city shot, as the only unrelated signs in the photo they're a bit distracting and look a little out of place.

I like this in B&W and I don't think it would have anywhere near as much impact in colour.
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Summary: An interesting capture. I like the light bouncing off the guy, but I think your viewpoint is either too high or far too low.

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It is my hope that these insights are helpful, and constructive. If you have any questions regarding this critique, please feel free to PM me. Also feel free to PM me with any feedback on this critique. And please remember to mark it "Helpful" if you found it so.

- Mark

Industrial Relic
by RulerZigzag

Comment by DJWoodward:
Challenge Relevance:6 Impact/Emotion/Mood:6 Technicals:7 Processing:5.5 Creativity:5

The Day's Remnants
by RulerZigzag

Comment by Ja-9:
such pretty colors in the sunset, but IMO the beach line does not add to the shot, to busy and cluttered (it almost looks like a bunch of trash scattered, even though I know it isn't)