10 Butterfliesby
PanoComment by kteach: Greetings from the Critique Club!
First Impression:
Creative idea and a clean and simple setup. I find the crop a bit distracting with the cut off face taking away focus from the butterflies, and the lighting is a bit too focused on one area for me.
Composition/Background:
Good choice of background color. I like the slightly curved line of the butterflies being off center. I hadn't noticed that the shape of her back was supposed to mimic the butterfly shape as you mentioned in your photographer's comments, but that does hold true to some extent. I like how the butterflies get smaller as they go down, but that one little blue one seems a bit out of place.
Technicals:
I think the lighting here has both its pros and cons. It does have a nice warm glow to it, which is exactly what you wanted for this shot, but it does seem a bit harsh and focused on one spot. I wish a wider part of her back was lit instead of it being focused mainly on the lower back. Having it focused in that one area brought out shadows along the ribs and other muscles/bones that distract from the line of butterflies.
Post Processing:
I find the crop to be distracting here. I'm not a fan of having her head and ear both cut in half. I would probably prefer to have just a bit of the chin left in place so that it's not just a back, but it's also a very anonymous shot at that point, leaving the entire focus to be on her back and not who she is. It's difficult to comment too much on the processing, since you didn't include any information about what you did in your photographers comments.
Last Thoughts:
After reading the other comments that were made during the challenge, it seems like you had a few others who mentioned some of the same issues that I have. Overall though, it was a clever and simple setup which was enough to get people to give it that little bump to a 6 the majority of the time instead of their average 5 with their first impression, with no really low votes. Congrats on the 16th place.
I hope this was helpful. Please feel free to PM me if you have any questions, and good luck in your future challenges!
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