Wind summonedby
nico_blueComment by Bear_Music: ***CRITIQUE CLUB RESPONSE***
Nico,
I can see in my mind's eye what you're after here, and it's quite a challenge you set yourself with this picture. It would be extremely difficult to pull off, and this particular image isn't even close to the "wow" point, unfortunately.
1. The overall sense of the image is muddy.
2. The depth-of-field is way too shallow.
3. even within the shallow DOF, the fingertips are not what we'd want to emphasize, certainly not at the expense of the paper fragments.
4. The vertical framing is working against what you'd want to accomplish; landscape mode would allow more horizontal "woosh".
5. For an image that's meant to convey "wind" this is curiously static. The horizontal framing proposed above would help free it up, as would placing the fingertips at a more dynamic, diagonal angle.
6. I suspect that using some degree of backlighting (only the fingertips would be lit, not the finger fronts, and the paper chips would glow a little) would help this image a lot.
7. I'd also like to see, within the horizontal framing, some of the paper chips blown
beyond the fingers, I think...
Good luck with this one if you choose to keep trying to perfect the concept. I'd love to see any further results.
(robt)
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