Ensalada de frutaby
photomComment by Jesuispeure: Greetings from the Critique Club!
First of all, excellent job with the photo. It's a creative idea nicely executed. There are a few things though that I think would add to the picture.
Compostion:
This is the area I think you could improve the most. Like I said when I commented during the challenge, the strawberry on top of the kiwis is pretty muddy. I'm not sure you could have fixed this by thickening the strawberry slice as one commenter suggested. I think the strawberry would have turned out too dark, unless you used another light source, which might have gotten rid of the nice kiwi effect. I think the best bet would be to place the strawberry directly on the glass as well. Also, I might have moved the strawberry placement a little up and to the right to get the most out of the rule of thirds and add interest.
Technical: This was a very strong aspect of the picture. The focus is sharp throughout and the lighting excellent (minus muddy strawberry). The exposure also appears to be dead on.
Appeal: Typically I'm not a big fan of food pictures. They make me think of cheesy hotel art and mid-grade Italian restaurants. However, the creativity of this shot greatly enhances the appeal for me. That's just my two cents though.
Meeting the Challenge: It's creative, it attempts something new, and it's nothing like what you have already submitted. I think it works very well.
In closing, I think that if you would be willing to go through the pain of thinly slicing kiwi again to take another crack at this shot with a non-muddy strawberry (or maybe a more translucent fruit? Oranges? oooh... that could be cool) I think it would be worth your while.
Good job!
Amanda
Photographer found comment helpful.
