Puffy
by jmlelii

Comment by graphicfunk:
from the critique club:
Now this is a very composition kept back from shinning by the use of the raw light. Such a light used to backlight the entire scene would have given you a superior effect. It would have brought out the smoke and created a more dramatic effect.

To stay here as it is, means bringing the light back further and employing fill lights to soften the harsness. I like unfiltered light but it requires a lot of attention to bring out the subject and subdue the blown highlights which grip the eyes about the fingers.

You have the right idea but always remember that you can never do enough variations of a given shot. I would have rotated the light around and made different captures. I would even have bounced the light off a reflector.

Again, the concept was great but the execution could have used more light variations to hit paydirt.

The Carnival
by jmlelii

Comment by saintaugust:
great capture.. though i'd crop in a little at the bottom to de-emphasize the blackness.. other than that, great.

The Carnival
by jmlelii

Comment by dsidwell:
Fun angle, interesting geometry, great image!

The Carnival
by jmlelii

Comment by kreybar:
It's all about the exposure & you hit this one on the head ! I like the ways my eyes keep moving around it ,.......

The Carnival
by jmlelii

Comment by Neil:
I like the color and contrasts here, and the idea is very nice. But there's something here that doesn't work for me and I can't pin it down. I think it's the dark tubes at the bottom. Maybe a little less black down there? Maybe a tiny bit of fill; the gradual lightening to the top would be fine, but maybe not this extreme?

Preperation
by jmlelii

Comment by La-Luna:
nice close up

Puffy
by jmlelii

Comment by phoensoul:
Great idea, but the harsh lighting and the editing on the front of the sweater take away from the concept.

Puffy
by jmlelii

Comment by slonko:
nice composition and colours
good luck in the challenge

Preperation
by jmlelii

Comment by slonko:
This is a great shot
I hope it will do very well

Puffy
by jmlelii

Comment by Pedro:
i bet that sweater smells awesome :S little harsh lighting onthe hands...you're getting a few blown highlights. nice lighting on the face, and interesting concept. Using multi-directional lighting (3 sources or more) would soften some of the shadows and bring back some of the models features.