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AmiYuyComment by jpochard: Hi from the Critique Club.
This will be a nice shot for you to keep of your friend.
When I first look at a photo, I try to determine which challenge it was from before actually looking at that information or the title. I really couldn't figure this one out. With the title, it helped me a bit to figure out choices, but it's not a strong connection for me.
Technically, I think there are some things that would improve the shot. The tones here seem dark and I'm not sure you could change the contrast much without really blowing out the white from the book pages. That being the case, I think your exposure might appear better if this was left in color. I think color might have done better to bring the emphasis onto the person writing.
The focus on the shot also appears a little soft to me. I would like better clarity on the face and the expression.
The composition is okay if you want a photo of your friend, but I'm not sure it conveys any kind of "story" or idea to the viewer. Maybe an angle more over his shoulder and getting more of the writing in the book would help? This composition would have worked better if the technical aspects were clearer and sharper I think.
I hope my comments were helpful and I hope you and your friends had a great time!
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