Moving Dayby
TommyMoe21Comment by Artyste: Greetings from the Critique Club. My critiques are generally geared towards trying to help you improve your score within DPC, and not on any true "artistic" merit of the photograph itself, unless it relates to DPC voters and scoring. Please keep that in mind as you read this.
Initial Thoughts
Not much to this.. what's with the big sign?
Composition/Content
While I understand what you were trying to accomplish with the composition (or, at least I think I do), It was a little too little for a shot that is otherwise just plain boring. I don't want to sound harsh, but that's how voters probably looked at this. You have everything you need for the challenge.. but there's just nothing *too* it. The harsh light from the ceiling fan only serves to detract as well, and really adds nothing. So, kudos to trying to liven up the shot with a different angle and perspective, but you just needed more to begin with. The sign is also.. to me.. a little gratuitous. The color clashes, and it really doesn't say anything the viewer doesn't already suspect. The room is empty, the challenge wanted the room empty, we don't really need to know *why* it is empty.. especially when the reason is done by means of photo attention stealing lime green sign.
Background
Not really applicable in this sense.
Camera Work/Technical
You exposure is ok for the most part, but the glaring lights hurt the shot. Were you to process the shot to take advantage of the lights (more gritty, dark, or contrasty), it might have worked more to your advantage. If you can't get a "WOW" shot for DPC, at least go overboard artistically, and try to wow some of us out there that can appreciate something a little different.
Digital Processing
Nothing really grabs you in this shot. The processing shows a realistic room with realistic lighting, and so it remains realistically plain. Some work and playing around with different filters and concepts could have brought something out in this that just isn't there as it is.
Fits the Challenge
Sort of.. it's an empty room, but you've kind of "filled" it with that sign. Like I said, gratuitous, and needed to go.. IMO.
My Opinion of the Photo
A nice job with perspective to try and turn a very mundane shot into a little something different. Without that sign, and with a bit more creative processing, you could have been on to something that might have garnered a higher 5. Always remember that DPC voters need something that grabs them immediately and can hold their attention. For my money, this is simply a shot I'd click 4 or 5 on within the first few seconds and move on.
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