Memento Moriby
mannjuditComment by Judi: G'day from the Critique Club!!!
I have sat here for the last 15 minutes reading all the comments and staring into your image. You have aimed for a time of the past that has great meaning to you. I feel you have almost succeeded in your venture.
The historical meaning within this image is unknown to many viewers but after studying this text on this page it has been made clearer to me. I feel that is a letdown in some area as I like to see an image tell a story without the need for text. Text always finishes a project off nicely but the initial story must come from the image first.
The sepia finish to the image isn't as strong as I feel it should be. Maybe going for a darker hue would bring it across more to the viewer. The noise within the image isn't quite strong enough for that era.
The layout of the shoes is very dramatic...that has come across very well....although I feel some of the detail has been lost within them.
The sky area seems to be separated by a white line...this is distracting to the image overall...although I find the large white area to be conducive of that era.
The lighting over the buildings is excellent and you have maintained great detail over that area. The DOF you have chosen was spot on to bring the image together overall.
The overall composition is excellent. You have chosen to include diagonals as well as horizontal levels which gives the viewer much to look at. The wider area of the water leading up to the bank on the other side directs the viewer into every detail of this image.
In general, I feel you have done very well to try to capture a moment in time but I feel with a few adjustments you will reach the level you were originally after.
Judi
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