A Natural Twistby
melismaticaComment: From the critique club:
Very nice composition because it starts center bottom, sweeps the left then coils to right and heads back and away to end at top right. This is a universal pattern associated with the serpent, the coil and certain bacteria.
The strenght of this picture is the unindentified article. My wild guess is that its texture appears to be metal. If it is metal I would guess it is the high tech barbed wire...yet I see a varying width which brings me back to first base. So the interesting shape and unknown item make this a very interesting study. It is a nice composition.
The shallow dof is the only major draw back. If we can easily identify the object, then the dof is not critical. If we can't, then the eyes want to examine every inch of the item and the viewers battle is quickly lost the moment they begin to study the image. It is more like a let down. Wow, what a shape? What is it? Let me see...uhmm focus is already gone past the middle coil on the right.
While the image is nice as is, this is an ideal subject which may be enhanced with a minor backlight, this would have added more mystery.
To conlude your idea was very nice, composition above average, but the execution of the quality, mainly the dof is the culprit. Always envision the shot in your minds eye and then do what ever is technically required. Normal shots and distant scenes differ greatly from the close up. A camera in auto mode, will never make this decision for you, so it is up to you to take care of this matter. The easiest way to do it is to make a test shot, check it in computer and then go back to finish.
dan