Lightning Pen
by clyp

Comment by TooCool:
From the Critique Club:

Your lack of photographers comments does not help to tell me what you were trying to achieve with this shot. This makes it a bit tougher to do an in depth critique but let's see what we can come up with anyways...

The overall concept of this shot is very sound! I like how you have a nice diaginal line running through the shot. You did a nice job of lining up the 'writing' with the pen. It actuall does appear to be coming out of the pen tip. You also have nice colors and a good overall color scheme!

The lighting on the pen itself however is a little confusing. It appears on the top half of the pen to be coming from one place. On the part of the pen you actually hold on to it's coming from all around. On the tip of the pen it appears to be coming from a different angle. The total effect of this is confusing to the eye. Another thing that is a bit confusing to the eye is that even though you have light seeming to come from different angles, the overall look of the shot is very flat. Was the light that you used to create the 'writing' the only light in the shot?

The pen itself also does not seem to be truly in focus. It doesn't look like soft focus, it actually looks OOF. This doesn't go over very well with the voters here.

What could improve the shot? Having never tried this type of shot I'm not sure. I know that I would really like to see it brightened up a bit and I would like to see the pen sharper. I think that these two improvements alone would have taken this from a nice shot to one that stood out of the crowd.
Yours
TC

Lightning Pen
by clyp

Comment by jayita:
well done

Lightning Pen
by clyp

Comment by megano:
very cool

Lightning Pen
by clyp

Comment by sherpet:
"Cool", or should I say....."HOT".....

Lightning Pen
by clyp

Comment by ALA:
A little more detail on the pen would have been nice, but overall a nice picture and interesting idea.

Old Bed Room
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Comment by erling:
Looks like something I'd have expected from real estate advertisements in the late 1800's ;)

Old Bed Room
by clyp

Comment by BakerBug:
The ligting seems too harsh.

Old Bed Room
by clyp

Comment by wrobel:
Eye wandering all over the place, nothing to focus on. Ya gotta have a subject. 4

Old Bed Room
by clyp

Comment by Evaan:
I like this capture. It feels like it should be Miss Kitty's room! The toning did a great job of making it look old. Like the perspective. 7

Old Bed Room
by clyp

Comment by edmeng:
Nice old feel with sepia tones.